Moment Eternal

Not exactly proper formatting, but it’ll have to do for now.

This story is pretty packed and very ambiguous. Reflection to come on how I wrote it.


EXT. WATERFALL CLIFF – DAY

A bare foot steps forward, toes gripping the edge of the rock.

MATCH CUT:

EXT. ROOFTOP – SUNSET

The other foot, now in a sneaker steps onto the concrete step. Jeans. A windbreaker. Brilliant orange skies. A skyline.

Just before we see his face–

MATCH CUT:

EXT. WATERFALL CLIFF

SCOTT 20s, stands topless, overlooking the ocean. The white water thunders down into sea. We’re behind him, the sun making his back glisten…

In slow motion, he bends his knees to jump.

SCOTT (V.O.)

I wanted to live forever.

MATCH CUT:

EXT. ROOFTOP – DAY

Scott falls forward off the ledge, arms wide, embracing his fate.

MATCH CUT:

EXT. WATERFALL CLIFF

He puts his arms forward, with his feet together as he plunges toward the big blue.

SCOTT (V.O.)

But I was running out of time.

INT. JAIL CELL – DAY

Scott, in orange, sits on his cot. The cell door swings open. An OFFICER waits for him.

JUDGE (V.O.)

Scott Bishop. Please proceed to the doors to receive your sentence.

INT. INTERROGATION ROOM

Scott sits in a bare concrete bunker, at a polished steel table. The lights BUZZ. He turns a KEY between his fingers. Two identical DOORS wait for him. FIVE LIGHTS shine above them. The first four are GREEN. The last is RED.

SCOTT (V.O.)

One door leads to death. The other, to immortality.

THREE green lights. Above, A WOMAN in a crisp two-piece suit, 40s. She watches from a large glass window.

TWO green lights.

SCOTT (V.O.)

I wanted to live forever.

Scott gets up, the plastic chair SCREECHES like nails on a chalkboard.

SCOTT (V.O.)

But I was running out of time.

He goes to the door on the right, tries the key. LOCKED. The woman leaves the window. Something was wrong. Very wrong. Scott goes to the door on the left.

One green light.

CLOSE ON the knob. The key goes in. It turns. His fist pushes it open.

No green lights.

He walks through.

MATCH CUT TO:

EXT. ROOFTOP – SUNSET

Scott is in his jeans and windbreaker. The fire escape door locks shut behind him. CLICK. He walks toward the ledge, footsteps CRUNCHING in the gravel.

SCOTT (V.O.)

If you could pick one moment…

One sneaker on the ledge.

SCOTT (V.O.) (CONT’D)

Just one moment, in your entire life.

Both feet up now.

SCOTT (V.O.)

To stay in, forever.

He leans forward.

SCOTT (V.O.)

Which would you choose?

The ground rushes toward him. But he is calm.

INT. HOSPITAL – EVENING

Scott is on a stretcher with an oxygen mask. BLOOD covers his head.

SCOTT (V.O.)

Some would choose their favourite moment.

FLASHBACK

INT. LIVING ROOM – DAY

YOUNG SCOTT, 8 years old, blows out candles.

A weak HEARTBEAT mutes the LAUGHING and SINGING.

BACK TO PRESENT

INT. HOSPITAL – CONTINUOUS

Doctors and nurses rush him down the halls.

SCOTT (V.O.)

Or their happiest.

FLASHBACK

INT. CHAPEL – DAY

Scott, in a tuxedo lifts the veil kisses a beautiful BRIDE. They pull away. And smile.

SCOTT

(softly) I love you, Ashley.

BACK TO PRESENT

INT. OPERATING ROOM – NIGHT

CLOSE ON Scott, eyes closed on the table. Electrodes on his scalp. The DOCTOR, a woman in her late 20s, looks at the monitor, charting his brain activity. She looks up. The woman from the prison is there, looking through the large glass window. The doctor pulls off her mask and looks at the nurse.

DOCTOR

I’m calling it. 2:21 AM.

SCOTT (V.O.)

I chose the moment when I felt free.

EXT. WATERFALL CLIFF – SUNSET

Scott stands on the edge of the cliff. And dives.

SCOTT (V.O.)

The moment where I’m most alive.

He falls, the water falling with him. Scott disappears into the ocean.

SCOTT (V.O.)

My name is Scott.

A bare foot steps forward, toes gripping the edge of the rock. Then the other.

CUT TO BLACK

SCOTT (V.O.)

I am immortal.

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